【课件】和爸爸骑马遇野兔读后续写讲评课课件

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VacationLikeNeverBefore

Itwassummer,andmy

dad

wantedtotreatustoavacationlikeneverbefore.Hedecidedtotakemeona

triptotheWildWest.

WetookaplanetoAlbuquerque,abigcityinthestateofNewMexico.WereachedAlbuquerqueinthelateafternoon.

UnclePaul,

mydad’sfriend,pickedusupfromtheairportanddroveustohisfarminPecos.

HiswifeTinacookedusadeliciousdinnerandwegottoknowhissonsRyanandKyle.MydadandIspentthenightintheguestroomofthe

farmhouse

listeningtothefrogsandwaterrollingdownthe

rivernearby.Veryearlyinthemorning,UnclePaulwokeusuptohavebreakfast.“Thedaystartsatdawnonmyfarm,”hesaid.Afterbreakfast,IwenttohelpAuntTina

feed

thechickens,whilemydadwentwithUnclePaultotakethe

sheep

outtograze(吃草).IwasimpressedtoseemydadandUnclePaulridinghorses.Theylookedreallycool.一.输入标题story页码1

Intheafternoon,IaskedUnclePaulifIcouldtakeahorseride,andhesaidyes,aslongasmydadwentwithme.Iwasn’tgoingtotakeahorseridebymyselfanyway.So,mydadandIputonournewcowboyhats,gotonourhorses,andheadedslowlytowardsthemountain.“Don’tbe

late

forsupper,”UnclePaulcried,“andkeeptothe

track

sothatyoudon’t

getlost!”“OK!”Mydadcriedback.AfterawhileUnclePaulandhisfarmwereoutof

sight.Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetrees,

andthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.Itlookedlikeabeautifulwoven(编织的)blanketspreadoutuponthegroundjustforus.trackn.pathorroughroad,esponemadebyvehicles,peopleoranimals路,小径（尤指车辆﹑人或动物造成的一.输入标题story页码2故事情节页码3一.输入标题概要页码4MydadtreatedmetoaspecialsummervacationinUnclePaul’sfarmintheWildWest,whereIexperiencedmyfirsthorse-ridingwithmyfather’scompany.一.输入标题续写页码6

Paragaph1:Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.____________________________________________________Paragraph2:Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark._____________Thecontent(内容)ofparagraph1:Howdidwegetlost?Thecontentofparagraph2:Howdidwefindourwayback?路上遇到一只兔子我们迷路了**续写思路——第一段关注第一段的首句+第二段的首句（第二段的首句通常是第一段故事的结果）第一段首句：Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.第二段首句：Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.因果关系:思路:——因为兔子的突然出现，我们迷路了。——兔子的出现导致了什么结果？**情节总结已知情节我和爸爸到西部荒野，体验农村生活，我看到骑马觉得很酷，感到好奇，并最终获准和爸爸一起骑马去山里。本课内容单击此处输入你的正文，文字是您思想的提炼，为了最终演示发布的良好效果，请尽量言简意赅的阐述观点；根据需要可酌情增减文字，以便观者可以准确理解您所传达的信息。单击此处输入你的正文，文字是您思想的提炼，为了最终演示发布的良好效果，请尽量言简意赅的阐述观点；根据需要可酌情增减文字，以便观者可以准确理解您所传达的信息。

未知情节兔子突然出现后发生了什么？如何找到回到农场的路？最终回到保罗叔叔家了吗？**分析故事情节、线索课程导入IntroductionRisingactionClimaxResolutionFallingactionDadandIwenttothewestandexperiencedalifeonthefarm(excited)IwentonahorseridewithDad(overjoyed)Arabbitjumpedout(nervous?\excited?)Wegotlost

(worried)Wefoundourwayhomeornot(thrilled?\frustrated?)Wereachedthefarmornot(relieved?\frightened?)首句精研：研读两段给出句，想想它们给我们提供了哪些续写线索？Para.1:Suddenlyalittlerabbitraninfrontofmyhorse..Para.2:Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.1.Howdidtheygetlost?2.Wheredidthehorsescarrythem?3.Howdidtheyfeelaboutanddealwiththesituation?1.Didtheyeventuallymakeitbacktothefarmhouse?2.Howdidtheygetback?3.Howdidtheyfeel?提问**分析文章细节MydadandIspentthenightintheguestroomofthefarmhouselisteningtothefrogsandwaterrollingdowntherivernearby.“Don'tbelateforsupper,”UnclePaulcried,“andkeeptothetracksothatyoudon'tgetlost!"Therewasarivernearby.(Para4)So,mydadandIputonournewcowboyhats,gotonourhorses,andheadedslowlytowardsthemountains.Thewriterandhisfatherwereondifferenthorses.**Arabbitjumpedout.Ichasedtherabbit.因果关系:——因为兔子的突然出现，我们迷路了。思路:——兔子的出现导致了什么结果？Myhorsepanickedandranaway.Wegotlost.Wegotlost.Wefoundourwayhomebyfollowingtheriver.UnclePaulcametotakeushome.Wereturnedtothefarm.一.输入标题Logic页码71.Howdidtheygetlost?2.Wheredidthehorsescarrythem?3.Howdidtheyfeelaboutanddealwiththesituation?1.Didtheyeventuallymakeitbacktothefarmhouse?2.Howdidtheygetback?3.Howdidtheyfeel?*首句呼应上文中间刻画细节尾句衔接过渡首句呼应上文中间刻画细节尾句萃章显志向Thehorsegotscaredor...XXXThethingsIandmyfatherdidXXX/feltWegotlost.Ifeelfearwhengotlostsay\do\feelfinallygothome，unforgettableexperience

Para1Para2Para1Para21.时间表达2.情感表达3.心理活动；4.动作描写；5.事件及经过；6.感悟；7.可套用的句式。Justthen,…=Justatthatmoment

正在那时扩写句子1.我追着兔子跑2.马跑的很快3.我不想摔下马4.爸爸让我平静下来5.我不想马伤到兔子

6.爸爸想到方法7.看灯光，我们感到激动。8.我感到特别害怕.9.我希望我们不会看到饿狼。翻译1.我追着兔子跑我毫不犹豫地追着兔子跑从来没有见过这么可爱的动物以至于我毫不犹豫地追着她。IhadneverinlifeseensolovelyacreaturethatIchaseditwithouthesitation.NeverbeforeinmylifehadIseensolovelyacreaturethatIchaseditwithouthesitation/thinkingtwice.so...that...如此...以至于...never倒装句

翻译2.马跑的很快马被吓所以跑的很快我的马吓得跑得比我想象的还快。MyhorsewassostartledthatitranfasterthanIcouldimagine.SostartledwasmyhorsethatitranfasterthanIcouldimagine.so...that...倒装句翻译3.我不想摔下马我努力保持平衡不让自己掉下马尽管我很害怕，我努力保持平衡不让自己掉下马。ThoughIwasfrightened,Itriedtokeepmybalancetopreventmyselffromfallingoff.FrightenedasIwas,Itriedtokeepmybalancetopreventmyselffromfallingoff.sparednoeffortstokeepmybalance,preventingmefromfallingoff.4.爸爸让我平静下来爸爸尽力让我平静下来爸爸感觉到了我的恐惧和担忧，尽力让我平静下来。Myfathersensedmyfearandconcerns,andhetriedtocalmmedown.Sensingmyfearandconcerns,mydadtriedtocalmmedown.非谓语动词：v-ing作状语佳句翻译5.我大声喊着，猛地一拉缰绳，防止马儿伤到这个小东西。（yellout,pullbackthereins,v-ing）6.我几乎要奔溃了，突然爸爸想到了一个好办法。7.一看到远处的微弱灯光，我们感到一阵激动。8.想到我们被困森林，没法找到回去的路，我感到特别害怕.9.带着怀疑的念头，我希望我们不会看到饿狼。5.我大声喊着，猛地一拉缰绳，防止马儿伤到这个小东西。（yellout,pullbackthereins,非谓语v-ing）Iyelledoutloudly,pullingbackthereinsinordertostopthehorsefromhurtingthelittlecreature.6.我几乎要奔溃了，突然爸爸想到了一个好办法。（beontheedgeof...when...）Iwasalmostonthevergeof

breakingdownwhenagoodideahitmyfather.7.一看到远处的微弱灯光，我们感到一阵激动。（themoment/minute;arushof...）Themomentwesawthefaintlightinthedistance,wefeltarushofexcitement.8.想到我们被困森林，没法找到回去的路，我感到特别害怕.Atthethought

thatwewerestuckinthedarkforestunabletofindthewayout,Iwasseizedwithastrongsenseofhorror.9.带着怀疑的念头，我希望我们不会看到饿狼。Withdoubtfulthoughtsgoingthroughmyhead,Ihopedthatwewouldn’tseehungrywolves.1.(状语从句+宾语从句)但是在我们跳下马之前，我们发现我们已经偏离了常规（beofthebeatentrack)，迷路了。2.(名词性从句)又累又饿，我在想我们能不能找到回去的路。3.（非谓语动词作状语）我一直叫喊着求助，希望我的叫喊能被听到，但是没有回应。Butbeforewejumpedoffthehorses,wefoundthatwehadbeenoffthebeatentrackandgotlost.Exhaustedandhungry,Iwonderedifwecouldfindourwayback.Ikeptshoutingforhelp,hopingmyshoutscouldbeheardbysomeone,buttherewasnoreply.

1.（独立主格结构做原因状语）这一切即将到来，毫无预兆，我感到恐惧。Allthiscoming,withoutwarning,Iwasseizedbyfear.

Ending:

Afterwhatseemedlikeages,thefarmhousefinallycameinsight.Finally,wearrivedatthefarmhouse,safeandsound.Whatanight!Finally,wearrivedhomesafelyjustintimeforsupper.Whatathrillingbutmemorablevacationitwas.Itturnsoutthereisalwaysawayoutofanyplight(困境)aslongaswestaycalm.

Reflectingonthismemory,Iregardedthisexperienceasmyspecialadventurewithmydad.Para.2:Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.自然式结尾留白式结尾呼应原文式结尾点题式结尾反思哲理式结尾

Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.Itwassuchalovelycreaturethatwedecidedtorunafterit.Intheprocessofchasing

it,Iwastotallyattractedbythecharmofbeautifulflowers.Afterawhile,wecompletelygotlostintheforest.Therewasnobodyinoursightbutthetrees.

“Wemaynotbeabletomakeitbacktothefarmhouseintimeforsupper.”Ithoughttomyself.Afterlongwalk,wefelthungryandtired.feelingdialogue（内心独白）actionsurroundingsExample

Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.Thecoldwindwasblowinghard

andthedarknessmademescared.“Dad,whatcanwedo?”“Allisgoingwell!”

Dadanswered.Wewanderedintheforestanddidn'tknowwhatwouldhappentous.Suddenly,weheardthesoundofariver.Wedecidetofollowtheriver.Afterawhile,weheardthefamiliarsoundofsheepandcaughtsightofthefarmhouse.surroundingsdialogueactionfeeling

Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.NeverhadIseensolovelyacreatureinmylifethatIfolloweditstrackwithoutthinkingtwice.Buttherabbit,whicharousedmyinterest,wasquicklyoutofsight.Intheprocessofseekingforit,Iwastotallyimmersedinthecharmofnature.Theluxuriantforests,thetinyflowersthatperfumedtheair,thegroupofsheepinthefardistanceandthesingingriverallmademefeelmysoulpurified.BothdadandIhadforgottenthetimeanditseemeddifficultforustogoback.Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.Silencebetweendadandmemadememorenervousandscared.Finallywedecidedtowait.Atthatmoment,itwascompletelydarkexceptthefaintlightgivenoutbyafewstarsinthesky.Allofasudden,IsawtorchlightmovingandheardthevoiceofUnclePaul.Instinctively,Ishoutedbackcrazily.Thefearanddespairthathadbeenbuildingupinsidemybodyjustcametoanend.Ultimately,wewereback,safeandsound.Sittingintheguestroom,Ifounditreallyblissfultobeaccompaniedbyourbelovedones.AppreciateapossibleversionSuddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.Withoutthinking,Ipulledthereinhardtoavoidthelovelycreature.Beyondmywildestdream,myhorsegotstartledandwentwild.Mydadacceleratedaswelltokeepmecompany,remindingmeloudlytograsptheropetightly.Itseemedlikeacenturybeforemyhorsefinallyrecoveredfromitsshockandsloweddownitspace.Oh,thankgoodness!Igotoffthehorsetorelaxmyachinglegsandsorearms.However,myreliefwassoontransformedintoconfusionandanxietywhenmyfathermentionedwehadbeenoffthetrack.一.输入标题sample页码12Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.Myfathertriedtocomfortmebuthisseriousexpressionsuggestedthatitwouldbedangerousifwecouldn’tgetbacktothetrack.Justatthatverymoment,thefamiliarsoundofrollingwatercaughtourattention.Almostatthesametime,weexclaimed“followtheriver”.Itwasthemostbeautifulmelodyintheworldthathelpedusfindourwaybacktothefarmhouse.Thesmellofcookingmeatfilledtheairsurroundingus.Onarrivalatthedoor,scoopedupbyUnclePaul,Ismiledwithrelief.一.输入标题sample页码13Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.Myhorsewasscaredandranawaywildly.IwassofrightenedthatIheldonthereinstightlyandtriednottofall.“Becareful!Keepcalm!“Mydadshoutedandtriedtokeepupwithme,extremelyworriedaboutmysafety.Itseemedacenturyhadpassedbeforethehorsesloweddownandcametoastop.Ifoundariverinfrontofus.“Whereweare？”Iaskedmydad.Soonwerealizedwehadgotlost.Welookedaroundtryingtofindthetrack,butfailed.一.输入标题sample页码13Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.“Wemusthavegotlost!”Iwhispered,afeelingoffearsurroundingme."Don'tworry,myson.”Dadtriedtocomfortme.“Irememberthereisarivernearthefarmhouse.Wecanfollowtherivertogoback."Hiswordsmademeexcited,thenwewentbackalongtheriverwiththelightofthemoon.Afterridingawhile,weheardthefamiliarsoundofsheepandcaughtsightofthewarmlightsofthefarmhouse.Finally,wereachedthefarmhouse,safeandsound.Whatathrillingbutunforgettableexperienceitwas!一.输入标题sample页码13